I have some changes that should be done to my paper ( because the writer in the last edit that I paid for did just a page and have!! and that is not fair to pay that amount AGAIN for just doing that!!)
However, my teacher just told me the changes that should be done to my research paper to fix it:
1- there should be a conclusion paragraph in the literature review! this conclusion bring up the major ideas presented in the literature review

2- in the4th paragraph of the introduction the writer wrote in the last sentence ( Other video-rich learning management systems have also be adopted and investigated by researcher, which accordingly arrived to similar conclusions (Choi and Yang, 2010)), SO WHAT ARE THE CONCLUSUONS? NAME SOME OF THEM!!

3- this part in the literature review (Moodle is the short name for Modular Object Oriented Dynamic Learning Environment. Moodle is a learning management system (in some literatures, it is called a virtual learning environment. In general, it is considered as a freeware, which means that it is relatively free to use………….(until the end of the literature review) WHERE ARE THE CITATIONS??!!!!!! THERE SHOULD BE A CITATION FOR EVERY IDEA. INFORMATION,OR SENTENCE THAT IS TAKEN FROM OTHER PEOPLE!! WHERE DID THE WRITER TAKE INFORMATION ABOUT MOODLE FROM??!!!
4- THE METHODOLOGY part SHOULD FOLLOW THE case study Design OF THIS qualitative research. READ ABOUT IT!!!! AND FOLLOW All ITS STEPS WHILE YOU ARE WRITING!! AND AT FIRST SAY WHY THE RESEARCH IS a case study.

5- IN THE DATA GATHERING AND ANALYSIS:
IN THIS PART :
All responses will be represented in a quantified manner on percentile scales and an overall weighted average score will be assigned to express the following measurement parameters:
• Student performance in written assignments.
Do they present better performance in the written assignments? Do they follow the rules that they have studied in the class or other classes? Do they improve their writing skill?
• Student performance in oral/presentation assignment.
Depending on their voice loudness, eye contact, body movement, self-confidence, word pronunciation, sentences grammar.
• Student performance in group projects requiring extensive teamwork.
Do they divide their tasks between group members? Do they plan for each task? Does everyone try to complete his/her task by him/her-self? Do they help each other? Do they finish the duty on time/ correctly?
• Student performance in quizzes?
Do they do the test on the due date? Do they answer most of the questions correctly?
• Student input to the class forum (counted in messages and characters, as well as the relevancy to the topic being discussed).
Each student should participate in each topic in the forums and replay or discuss other students’ answers.
• Student utilization of the instant messaging service (counted by characters and relevance to the question being asked).
Does the student know how to send/ replay a message? Does he use the instant messaging service in an appropriate way?
• Student impression of the overall Moodle experience.
• Student impression of using videos within Moodle.
• Student overall engagement and communication skill improvement after the class.
• Teacher input (ease of use, installation, operation, troubleshooting, etc.)
• Teacher impression of class performance, communication, class material preparation and system maintenance and interface

HOW TO MESURE THESE??!!!! YOU DIDN’T SAY OR MENTION THAT!!

6- the references should be order in alphabetic (A-Z)

7- the most important thing is that ( the all the paper should be in the past tense !! it is a research paper nor proposal!!! )