I would like the writer to work on the reviewer report feedback comments.

I will upload the description and the document later

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Today only i have recieved my supervisor comments on the dissertation.

Please read my supervisor comments below which is really aggrassive to me:

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please read the supervisor feedback:

Let me begin clearly with the observation that you have chosen not to take the advice I gave you in April (over two long emails and which I have inserted below in the interests of clarity). I asked you to work on your original data as that is what is significantly underdeveloped. In response, you have sent me an isolated literature review chapter with no page numbers, frequently incorrect English, inconsistent and sometimes wrong citations, and no bibliography. Nonetheless this is a matter for your choice. I am not sure that if, by this stage, you cannot see that a literature review without a bibliography is academically incomplete, I can expect to persuade you otherwise.

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> As to what you have submitted: the standard of your work in this version of the chapter has admittedly improved, but it is still some distance from the formal or intellectual norms required by the second and third reviewers for a successful defence. As an indication, perhaps unfortunately, the opening sentence of the substantive review is an unsubstantiated claim about the origins of stress!

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> Where is it that I have not been clear that this is not acceptable?

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> I attach the draft with over 60 comments. I got to 50 in the first 11 pages and then sampled further on to see if the standard was the same: the English appears to deteriorate as the chapter progresses.

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> From my comments you will see what is missing or adrift, and I invite you to apply the rigour that informs these standards (and with particular attention to (i) correct and consistent citations; (ii) clear and correct English; (iii) the avoidance of general claims which have nothing to contribute to your argument) throughout the document. Referring to my April comments you are still well above 20,000 words here – I think there is a lot that you can still cut given my comments on pointless generalities (each of which only undermines the quality of the chapter). Please either excise them or write them so that they have some constructive value. OK?

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> Let me know if you have any questions please.