Supervisor second comments need the research proposal amendment;
I have read through your work offer the following five tips:
1. I would expect more recent references given the topic, have you searched the library website for human resources enterprise systems or management systems?
2. You make some valid and important points which are not supported by any research or authors
3. Some of the paragraphs offer a description of what you have read but do not apply/link this to your research objective or questions, at least not clearly.
4. Have you identified a conceptual framework to guide your research?
5. If in doubt refer to the unit handbook and check the pro-forma provided for guidance